I think that my friends are suffering tl;dr-itis when it comes to my latest post
on my personal journal, asking for impressions of a story I'd like to run for my Vampire: the Requiem character. And I figured if I tossed it out to all of you, someone out there would have a boring desk job or lazy summer vacation and wouldn't mind spending the 20 minutes reading the various bits of setup ^_-;
My basic request: as an outsider, does the story I outline at the end make Az seem petulant and whiny? If so, how would you change it? (Obviously, this is going to be modified by me if it doesn't fit the character, but suggestions are welcome.)
If it doesn't come off as whiny or petulant, what sort of impression does
it give of the character and of her relationship to her mentor?
Assuming the story went forward as planned, how would you suggest resolving the tension between the two characters, keeping in mind the aspects of their personality laid out in the opening (and the fact that they're both Resolve 4 stubborn Ventrue, and not liable to change too
much)? Ideally, I'd like to keep
the five points of Mentor, but it's not a strict requisite. :P
Things you might need or want to know that I assume as default background:
-Montreal is a Lancea Sanctum cesspit of terror-mongering and violence that tried to murder the guy we asked to help us wake D'or as we left.
-our city is at war with Toronto. They have, basically, a Circle of the Crone SS squad led by a very powerful Mekhet, when our city has one
Mekhet. They are terrifying.
-the crazy sewer witch was a very deadly CoC Nosferatu that has tried to murder us on multiple occasions and had 1 Humanity and worked for gates that may or may not lead to Hell.
Anyway, here's the link again
in case anyone wants to offer up suggestions.